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Spread 'em wide, spread 'em fast
Fuck me hard, forget the past
Lets see how long I can last
When you fuck me hard, and fuck me fast

And so we decay
The walls fall away
I haven't a thing left to say
So inside I know I died today

Take me now and make me feel
Something I don't know is real
With the thighs as cold as winter steel
I sign my soul in this devil deal

And so we decay
The walls fall away
I haven't a thing left to say
So inside I know I died today

In my heart there's holes
Where the her.mites ate me
In my head there's holes
When the bullets left me breathless

And so we decay
As the warmth fades away
The bugs wont even stay
Because the Angel died today
©2007-2009 ~SethCynical
:iconsethcynical:

Author's Comments

Where anyone who's someone lives.
Where everyone who's no one dies.
Where every single angel cries,
and everyone you meet is all just lies.
It's L.A. baby!
If you can't make it here, you've probably destroyed yourself trying.

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:icondeadetiquette:
I love reading your stuff. It's so blunt - you don't dance around the subject, as though you don't want to commit to what you're saying. You're totally unflinching about what you think. It's refreshing. Though, I'm sure I've said that a million times by now.

While it's a little bit repetitive at times, I particularly like the "bullets leave me breathless" bit.


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"Nowadays a broken heart will run to many editions." -Lord Henry Wotton
:iconsethcynical:
First of all, thank you, that's very uplifting, hearing praise to my work.

With the "Bullets leave me breathless" part, what it was.. was this thing that happens, where.. sometimes.. when I'm "working my mojo" so to speak, I'll give birth to these really fantastic ideas or lines that just stand out from the rest. Now, all my lines are like children, and I couldn't pick a favorite kid. But fortunately, they're not EXACTLY like children, so I can have a favorite, and that's one of them. There was definitely a twinkle in my eye when I penned that one down.
Oooo, I'm gettin' goosebumps just talkin' about it.
:icongracelesssanslagrace:
This is very well done. Nice and direct but without being crude -- that's very difficult. I sincerely hope that you're proud of this piece.

Let's have a round of applause, shall we? :clap::clap:clap:

There were a few little missing apostrophes, but the poem as a whole was so excellent that that didn't stop me from favourite-ing it. Knew I was watching for a reason.


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"I never tilt against Beauty."
:iconkreuger:
Where the hell do you come up with this shit dude? You're fucking pure genius

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Simply the best.

Clubs: =SurrealismClub ~GIMPtacular ~Minds-Of-Mencia ~NeowinDeviantGang ~PStoGIMPbrushes ~the-gimp
:iconmiss-deviant:
the first stanza is my favourite. just really raw. implies so many things in VERY few words.

i really wish i had things to write about, but, that's the life of a designer:p

:+fav:, as always

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:icondeadetiquette:
You're very welcome. :)

It's kind of neat how those particular lines stand out - even though they are totally in context.

I don't know, though; some people pick favourites out of their kids, too.


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"Nowadays a broken heart will run to many editions." -Lord Henry Wotton
:iconrawrmanthethird:
Very nicely written crazy man. I quite enjoyed it. -does a dance-
:heart: :love: :blowkiss:

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Feed me please.
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:iconsethcynical:
I am proud. Very proud. Especially with all the love you folks have been leaving. it's really quite awesome.
:iconsethcynical:
Thanks, that means a ton. I guess I just have a way with words, especially when I write them down.

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